Consider technological innovations and developments in your field or other fields and address both of the following questions. First, examine the social consequences of one such innovation and describe how this innovation has either increased or decreased social justice or equality in the U.S. Then, discuss whether and/or how this technology will have positive or negative impact on interactions between people from different cultural, racial, and ethnic groups within the U.S. Please integrate course material (concepts, theories, discussions, lectures, readings). Please cite at least one course reading and one appropriate source from outside class. All course materials are posted on the course homepage.
Comments: You had a really unique topic and I like that you brought in your own project as an example of the technology. Unfortunately, there’s quite a few writing errors throughout this piece and more specifically in how it lacks a cohesive thesis that focuses and previews what your arguments will be.
This essay has no foundational thesis and lacks clear support for its main arguments. I got lost as to what was being argued throughout the piece.
This essay is too general to deal with the content of the prompt. I found the interactions paragraph to be lacking. See comments for details.
My major is Biomedical Engineering, which is a major that combines multiple subjects in different areas, as the name states, it contains portions of biology, medical and engineering. The first time I came into contact with this major, I thought that biology or medical occupies most of it, however, after a period of exploration, it turns out that the Engineering is the major subject. Biomedical Engineering is a subject that studies human body at all levels, then use engineering technology to control those changes. Its Purpose is to solve related problems in medicine in order to protect human health, and serve the prevention, diagnosis, treatment and rehabilitation of diseases. is this your thesis?
In my perspective, the most important technological innovations in my field are the advent of home use medical devices. Home use medical devices, as the name suggests, is a medical equipment which is mainly suitable for home use, it is different from the medical equipment used in hospitals. The purpose of this kind of device is to let people use it anywhere other than professional health care facilities, or avoid the involvement of highly trained persons like physicians. Therefore, home use medical devices have the characteristics of simple operation, small size, and convenient portability. Nowadays, many families had various simple medical devices, such as clinical thermometers, stethoscopes, blood pressure monitors, urine and stool care instruments, and so on.
Among all home use medical devices, clinical thermometer is the most representative. With the popularization of clinical thermometers, the social inequality has dramatically decreased because everyone can now have better understanding of their own body status. If people feel unwell, then they can use the thermometer to determine their body temperature and the severity of the illness, then use different methods to treat the symptoms in time. For example, if the body temperature is somewhere between 37 and 38 degree Celsius, it means that the situation is not very serious, stop working and let the body relax is the best way at this stage; however, if the body temperature goes up to 39 degree Celsius, then patients will know they should go see a doctor immediately.
My senior project is also a home use medical device, which is a paper based microfluidics device used in the prevention of chronic kidney disease, it can monitor kidney health by testing and analyzing patients’ blood. Chronic kidney disease is a serious kidney disease, there are more than 37 millions of US adults who are estimated to have chronic kidney disease, and 9 in 10 of them are not aware of they have the disease (Tuot et al. 2019), and the death rate is about 4.5%. However, early detection and proper treatment will significantly decrease the death rate (Casey et al. 2016). With the test strip, everyone can receive a fast and convenience self-check. The average cost for a kidney health test is around 60 dollars in medical facilities, not expensive, but there are still people who cannot afford. In the United States, 46 million of people cannot afford basic health services. The test strip is very cheap, which cost 50 cents per strip, it gives people who cannot afford health services an opportunity to check their kidney status, which decreased the social inequality.
Home use medical devices will have negative impact on the interactions of different cultural, racial, and ethnic groups in the U.S. Before the population of home use medical device, there is a higher percentage of unwell people who choose to go to medical facilities such as hospitals and clinics. Now, people have the ability to check their body situation using different home use medical devices, families or neighbors have become more important, there are less urgent motivations for patients to see doctors anymore. This fact will lead to increased communication between the same culture or races. You argue in the first sentence of this paragraph that the devices will have negative impacts on interactions, but the rest of the paragraph say the opposite.
All in all, the improvement of life quality has made the demand of home use medical devices gradually increase. On the one hand, home use medical devices has benefits in decreasing the social inequality by giving everyone the same opportunity be healthy; On the other hand, it reduces the communication between people in different cultures and races. Although home use medical device has both benefits and harm for the society, the purpose of it is to make people live a better life, so the step of innovation in home use medical device is never stopping.
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